I am uploading the feedback for week 5 here because this is the paper that needs to be worked on and the Professor has placed the feedback in the paper. I have also included the Professor feedback.
By now, you have received multiple weeks of feedback from your Instructor. Are you consistently and thoughtfully addressing their feedback in your revisions? Please do so, as feedback is intended to be considered and appropriately addressed. In addition, you will want to review your work for further revisions, ensuring your writing is clear and precise.
For this Assignment, you will review the Learning Resources on feedback, and flow and cohesion. With the principles outlined in the Learning Resources in mind, you will further revise your paragraph from the Week 5 Assignment.
To prepare for this Assignment:
- Review the Learning Resources on feedback, and flow and cohesion.
- Review feedback obtained from your Instructor (weekly assignments) and from colleagues (Discussion posts). You may wish to make a list of topics that your Instructor has raised in their feedback to you over the previous weeks, and construct a reference file for use in your future revisions.
Revise the three paragraphs from the Week 5 Assignment, addressing relevant feedback from your Instructor. You may also add new content to your paragraphs.
BY DAY 7
Submit your Assignment using the Walden Course Paper template.
Monica, overall, this is very well done. You have a great start here, and I just had a few concerns about source use, clarity, and a few instances of sentence issues.
Please see my feedback in the attached file. I have made the comments in Word to make it easier to revise.
I hope my feedback is helpful!